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PostSubject: Goodbye- A different version of Second Spring   Sat Sep 17, 2011 2:47 am

This is also on ff.net. I will post the other chapters later. The song is on a Sarah Brightman CD and not mine.
Chapter 1
Can you see all of me
I am hiding nothing
Must you stay so far away
Won't you whisper something?

You'll go and leave me
Don't have you tell me
Don't have you tell me
You'll be unfaithful
Probably on Thursday
Probably on Thursday

Harriet sighed. She had a feeling something was going on with Nels. He never showed her love anymore. The missing Cameo gave her a feeling something was wrong. She had just written those words to a song that she wrote in her diary.

"What if he's found someone at the boarding house? Is it something I did? I know he gets upset with me, and we did think of divorce before, but this time he might be gone for good." That thought broke her heart.

This is what she was thinking as she lay in bed. She decided that if there was someone she would leave for good. Then she realized that there probably was overreacting. He's just busy, or he might be with someone. She did something she hadn't done in a while, she prayed.
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PostSubject: Re: Goodbye- A different version of Second Spring   Fri Sep 23, 2011 6:18 pm

I like how your story began, Harrietfan, and I really want to know the following "chapter" .

I've always wanted to see "Second Spring" with Harriet eyes and now you are giving me this possibility.

Many thanks fot it!

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PostSubject: Re: Goodbye- A different version of Second Spring   Sun Sep 25, 2011 3:56 pm

There is a major plot change from the episode now!
Chapter 2

Harriet hadn't slept that much that night, but got up early because she had to get up to work at the mercantile. When Nels had left to return to the town of Tracy he was wearing a toupee. Harriet thought she could make him realize how foolishly he looked, so she had told him that it looked like a dead squirrel. Nels had then said he didn't know if he'd be back. Harriet knew then that the end of the marriage was probably near. She decided to wait until she knew for certain that Nels was cheating to tell anyone anything about their problems

Later during the day Nels returned to tell Hariet he was leaving.

"I just can't go on living with you Harriet. I'm leaving", explained Nels.

"Oh Nels, do you want to try talking to Rev. Alden at all? Some marriage counseling? Nels is there someone else in your life?" asked Harriet hoping he would confess.

To Harriet's surprise and disbelief he told her no. Harriet had a feeling he had lied. She didn't know how she'd tell the children. This had almost happened before though, so they might somewhat understand. They were older now too. She spent the rest of the day tending to the store. She decided to tell the children tomorrow. When she was getting ready for bed, she became upset upon seeing Nels's wedding ring he left on his dresser. "What an old fool!", she thought She prayed again that night that the futre would go well for her.
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PostSubject: Re: Goodbye- A different version of Second Spring   Sun Sep 25, 2011 11:51 pm

That's great, Harrietfan! You can easily feel Harriet's pain and confussion when she understood her marriage was coming to an end. I know that Harriet tended to be gossipy and hard toward Walnut Grove people, but she was good and in "Second Srping" you I feel sorry for her. No

Now, in your fiction, I can understand the whole thing more deeply, since you sees it with Harriet eyes, while "Second Springs" shows it thourough Nels point of view...You are an excellent storyteller!

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